I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Kahikatea and my teachers are Whaea Tamzin and Whaea Sharlee. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
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Tuesday, May 5, 2020
My light poem
Today I was learning about light and I made a light poem.
I enjoyed making a poem about light.
Do you like light or dark?
I like how you have used descriptive language in your poem to make it easy to imagine the light! I really liked the line bounces off my bike into my eyes! This is so true and can be both annoying at the time but beautiful to think about later.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Hi Livia,
ReplyDeleteI like how you have used descriptive language in your poem to make it easy to imagine the light! I really liked the line bounces off my bike into my eyes! This is so true and can be both annoying at the time but beautiful to think about later.